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Reviewer: Kaleeb18 (talk · contribs) 02:26, 6 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]


Man, how is this article not been picked up. I love Barry Sanders. ― Kaleeb18TalkCaleb 02:26, 6 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
  • conflict between him and his father, William – no comma needed
  • Mark McCormick, a friend of Sanders told him that – comma after Sanders
  • Sanders told him that his father told McCormickMcCormick should just be him
  • 3,248 total all-purpose yards, 234 points, 39 total touchdowns, – the word and needs to be before 39
  • investigation by the NCAA, and later was given – no comma needed
  • Sanders had applied silicone to his personhis person should be just himself
  • In Week 7, Sanders set several then career highsthen career highs should have hyphens in between the words
  • 114-yards and a touchdown and 28 attempts for 145-yards respectively – comma before respectively
  • Sanders ranked third in rushing touchdowns and ranked sixth in rushing attempts respectively, and wasrespectively and the comma are not needed
  • was ranked sixth in total yards per rushing attempt with 5.1 rushing – comma before with
  • two touchdowns of 2-yards and 23-yards respectively on 30 attempts – comma before respectively
  • the Bert Bell Award.[1]The Lions finished the regular season with – there needs to be a space between the reference and the
  • out the 38–6 victory, he recorded five receptions – replace he recorded with just recording
  • Divisional Round in the prior season, and would eventually win the Super Bowl that season. Sanders – no comma before and and replace the period with a comma
  • Sanders recorded 18 attempts for 108-yards, the Lions – replace the comma with a semicolon
  • 44–38 victory against the Minnesota Vikings, he had a 53-yard rush but fumbled – replace the comma with a semicolon
  • and second in the league in rushing yards per game behind Smith – who is Smith? I assume its Emmitt Smith but his first name and a link shold be there
  • career rushing yards rankings, ranking tenth all-time – remove the word rankings
  • I finished all of these, waiting for more.

more to come...

  • t80+ yards (82-yards and 80-yards respectively – comma before respectively
  • season, and become only the third running back in history to reach 2,000 rushing yards – change become to became. Also remove the word only
  • Pro Bowl and first team All-Pro teams, and awarded his second Bert Bell Award – no comma needed
  • All-Pro four times in 1992, 1993, 1996 and 1998 – comma after 1996
  • inducted him in 2004 and 2005 respectively. – comma before respectively
  • elusive runner in NFL history, and was placed – no comma needed
  • Sanders' oldest son, Barry J. Sanders, played running back for Stanford University from 2012 to 2015, and at Oklahoma State University in 2016, after a highly successful high school career: as a freshman in 2008, Barry ran for 742 yards and twelve touchdowns while helping Heritage Hall School to the 2008 Oklahoma 2A state title, and he was the only sophomore on the 2009 Tulsa World all-state team. – this is a way too long stringy sentence
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
  • (although some sources say it was for 19-yards), – remove although as it is a word to watch. Also no comma needed
2. Verifiable with no original research:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
  • Done.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
  • biography.jrank.org is unreliable according to WP:RSN
  • what makes Sporthavenreliable
  • Removed both, they were not needed anyway.
2c. it contains no original research.
  • for his on-field humility. Despite his flashy playing style, Sanders was rarely seen celebrating after the whistle was blown. Instead, he handed the ball to a referee or congratulated his teammates. He was recognized for putting his teams' success over his stats, as shown when he denied a request from head coach Wayne Fontes to return to play in a game so that he could gain enough rushing yards to become the rushing leader for that season. – there is no source for this
  • Sanders was not fond of this as he believed Thomas to be a good teammate. Thomas moved on to the NFL in 1988 which allowed Sanders to become the starter for his junior year. – there is no source for this
  • spotchecks for ref 5, 16, 23, 31, 47, 56, 70, 82, 99, 122, and 142 are all good
  • Added sources for both.
2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
  • Because there is a 70.1% possibility of a violation, I suggest trimming some of the big quoteboxes
  • I trimmed them down a bit, how does it look now?
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
  • All images are in the public domain
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
7. Overall assessment.