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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Happy Bhag Jayegi/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 09:42, 1 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]


I will review this article. Thank you.  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 09:42, 1 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • "as the eponymous heroine Happy" — Just "as Happy" would do.
  • "bride to be" should be "bride-to-be"
  • Saurabh Goswami is mentioned as the cinematographer in the lead but not in the infobox. Please do so.
  • Best to remove the names of the cast members in the plot section.
  • "who decides to arrange for her deportation." — Can be rephrased as "who in turn decides to arrange for her deportation."
  • "Happy blackmails Bilal into helping her by using a contrived story accusing him and his father of human trafficking." — sounds a bit vague. Be a little more clearer on this.
  • "who initially suspects him of having an affair with Happy." — The plot doesn't explain when Zoya has a change of heart about her perception of Happy and Bilal having an affair.
  • "Bagga later realises the fraud as he helplessly" — Rephrase it as "Bagga later realises the sham when he helplessly"
  • "whispers something in the latter's ear" — Is it revealed later what it was? If not, it doesn't seem to be relevant enough.
It's similar to what happens at the end of Lost in Translation; it is an important detail because it is left to the viewers to interpret the scene in any possible way.
  • "It was Rai's first venture as a producer" — If this was his first venture then you can add a footnote about how Nil Battey Sannata released earlier.
  • Wikilink romantic drama.
  • "The former felt that the album had an "interesting mix of different styles" and dubbed it "memorable" in his review three and a half out if half star review for The Times of India." — Rephrase it as "The former, writing for The Times of India, gave the album three and a half out of five stars and felt that it had an "interesting mix of different styles" and dubbed it "memorable"."
  • Wikilink "salwar kamiz" and "pathani".
done; pathani suit has already been linked in the artcile.
  • Where's the source/URL for Masand's review?
  • "The performances of majority of the cast were well received by film critics." — Source?
  • "The performances of majority of the cast were well received by film critics. Penty was variously dubbed as "brimming with potential" and a "misfit"." — you can say it simply as "The performances of majority of the cast were well received by film critics, who dubbed Penty as "brimming with potential" and a "misfit"."
Since the second part is a mixed reaction, I'd rather keeo them separate.

Once these comments are addressed, Numerounovedant, then I'll promote this article.  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 09:01, 2 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking up the review Ssven2, I have hopefully addressed all your comments. VedantTalk 10:46, 2 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. Has an appropriate reference section:
    B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  7. Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
    Pass or Fail:

The sources are good too. Nice work on the article, Numerounovedant.  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 14:48, 2 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]