Talk:American Girl (Bonnie McKee song)/GA1

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 18:40, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

• Add the producer → According to Spotify Oliver Goldstein, credited as Oligee, and Josh Abraham produced the track

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• Add the producer (see above)
• Let's re-write this
• Fix the speeling mistake on canceled
• "American Girl" is a song by American singer and songwriter Bonnie McKee intended to be the lead single off her canceled second studio album. Epic Records first released it to McKee's SoundCloud on June 25, 2013. The song was written by McKee, Josh Abraham, Jon Asher, Alex Drury, Oliver Goldstein and Jacknife Lee. The song has been described as a dance-pop and electropop track. Its lyrics address McKee's childhood and teenagehood from an American perspective.
  • Replaced song with track in the 4th sentence to avoid repetition. Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:21, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  You get track two times in a row, try single MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:17, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  • My bad, forgot it was at the end of the sentence. Replaced with "single". Sebbirrrr (talk) 13:15, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
• Link music critics to music journalism
  • Already linked. Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:21, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
• Remove Germany
• Who directed the first Music video?
  • Couldn't find any information on that unfortunately. The closest thing to that is the fact that she invited her "famous friends" to appear in the video via video-conference technology (per https://www.vanityfair.com/hollywood/2013/06/katy-perry-pajamas-american-girl) Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:21, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  No, but you can use it for the reception of the MV MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:17, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  • Added it in both the music video and reception sections. Sebbirrrr (talk) 13:15, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
• "alongside other celebrities..." → such as?
• For further promotion, McKee performed the song on various occasions. → McKee performed the song on various occasions → such as?

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• Due to a connection → However, the connection
• Elliott Yamin and Leighton Meester → American/English singers, songwriters?
• Katy Perry → same as previous
  • As I already referred to Yamin and Meester as American singers, wouldn't it look awkward to refer to Perry as an American singer too? Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:21, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  I changed it MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:20, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  • That's better. Sebbirrrr (talk) 13:15, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
• Dr. Luke → same as previous
• Leona Lewis → same as previous
• Justin Bieber → same as previous
• that Epic → the aforementioned label
• The track was meant to be the lead single off her untitled second album.[6] However, the album did not materialize as she chose to leave Epic Records, claiming that she felt "really unhappy" with the label.[7] "American Girl" was issued to McKee's SoundCloud for streaming by the former label on June 25, 2013.[8] Epic Records also sent the song to American contemporary hit radio stations on July 16 and released it for digital download in various countries one week later.[9][10] → The track was issued to McKee's SoundCloud for streaming by Epic Records on June 25, 2013.[8] The label also sent the song to American contemporary hit radio stations on July 16 and released it for digital download in various countries one week later.[9][10] "American Girl" was meant to be the lead single off her untitled second album.[6] However, the album did not materialize as she chose to leave Epic Records, claiming that she felt "really unhappy" with the label.[7]
• Add the producer → see above
• Wikilink Oliver Goldstein to Oliver (DJs)

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• "American Girl" has been described as a→ "American Girl" is a

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• Should mention its highest peak on Mainstream Top 40
  • Before I add it, should I refer to it as the song's highest peak? Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:21, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  Sure. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:03, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  • Added. Sebbirrrr (talk) 13:15, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
• Remove Germany
• Elsewhere, it reached number 31 in New Zealand,[19] 41 on South Korea's Gaon International Chart,[20] 51 in Australia,[21] and 82 in Germany.[22] → Elsewhere, it reached number 31 in New Zealand, 41 on South Korea's Gaon International Chart and 51 in Australia.[19][20][21]

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• Who directed the first video?
  • See above. Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:21, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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• while Lansky compared it → and compared it
  • Shouldn't it be 'and Lansky compared it' since Rubenstein is mentioned before him? Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:21, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  Yes, my bad. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:04, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  • Added 'and Lansky compared it'. Sebbirrrr (talk) 13:15, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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• Fine

• Fine

• MTV is not work, but publisher (ref. 16 and 24)
• Source check: 3, 6-9, 11, 12 13, 20 and 21
• Reference 20 archive is giving a 404 error and I can't verify the chart peak, please provide another source
  • Added another archive link, hope it works now. Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:21, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
• Source 3 is via Reuters
  • That's what I already added...? Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:21, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    • Didn't noticed, sorry. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:03, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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• Let me know once you are done. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:25, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • @MarioSoulTruthFan: Hi, thanks again for reviewing! I've addressed everything and left comments about stuff I was unsure of. Sebbirrrr (talk) 19:21, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

    Replied to the questions and made some changes to the article. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:21, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

    • @MarioSoulTruthFan: Hope everything is alright now. Sebbirrrr (talk) 13:15, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

      I made some small changes in between, see if you are ok with those. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:27, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

      @MarioSoulTruthFan: Yep that's fine with me. Sebbirrrr (talk) 13:41, 22 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]