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Hi, I'm Music2611, I'll be conducting this GA review, the article looks quite good at first sight.

Lead

  • Why do you put the airdate info here and not in the reception section?
  • Quotations should be cited.

Plot

  • This might be nitpicky, but you seem to overuse the word "fit". Try using "get in shape" once in a while.

Production

  • No further issues here. Great work!

Reception

  • Again with the date thing.
  • There's a mention of a cameo by Matt Groening, there should be mention of it in the production section, as it seems quite notable.
  • You jump from past to present tense: "...commented that the first act of the episode is the strongest..." for instance. Please change everything to present tense.
  • In the final sentence, change I to [he].

Other issues

The AV refrences covers Richerdsons and Groeing's apperences.--Pedro J. the rookie 00:22, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The AV club covers that one says taht richerdson appered in every episode.--Pedro J. the rookie 20:50, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

No, he says "Also, my DVR cut off a lot of the closing credits tonight because it’s stupid, but was Kevin Michael Richardson in all four shows?" That is too vague. Theleftorium 20:51, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why does the AV Club ref says The AV Club is published by VanDerWerff?

That's all I'll put this article on hold for a week until the issues have been resolved. I believe the article has some potential for FAC, though it needs some more polishing. Also, feel free to review my FAC "The Revenge", which is currently running very low on reviewers. Cheerio.--Music26/11 21:24, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the review! :) Theleftorium 20:43, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Pass this article has passed its GA review. I'll take care of the loose ends later, I have to go right now.--Music26/11 11:30, 21 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]