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Reviewer: Prism (talk · contribs) 18:22, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Gift nº 3. :) Prism 18:22, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Dude you're on a roll --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
General
  • Disambiguation links: Not present.
  • Checklinks: Correct these external links.
Corrected. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Original research: Not present.
In depth

1. Lead

  • I don't understand this sentence: "Along with the original perfume, S by Shakira Eau Florale was promoted by Shakira at a press release in Paris, France, in March 2013." What does this really mean? They were both promoted in the same press release?
I made it simpler to read now --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

2. Development 2.2. Scent and packaging

  • Remove quotation marks from blockquote and insert a dot in the end of it
Removed. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

3. Release

  • "was available for purchase in more than 15,000 stores" → unclear. Worldwide?
I added the US part. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

4. Flanker fragrances 4.1. S by Shakira Eau Florale 4.1.1. Background and scent

  • "packing" → packaging, no?
Whoops! --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Final comments

Well, this will be even faster than the previous reviews. A very nice read! Prism 18:22, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I can't thank you enough! You have cleared out so many of my pending reviews! I am drowning in debt! THANK YOU SO MUCH! --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.