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GA Review

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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 20:48, 12 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Opening statement

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In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use  Done,  Fixed, plus Added,  Not done,  Doing..., or minus Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. —♠Vami_IV†♠ 20:48, 12 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Disclosure. I have reviewed some of the nominee's articles in the past and passed each once of them. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 20:48, 12 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Architecture

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The decision to place "Architecture" before "History" is a unique one to me.

  • Several grotesques located are at points where the arcade's north and south wings intersect the mezzanine; they depict major figures involved in the Woolworth Building's construction. Condense.
    •  Done
  • Condense the paragraph about the pool under "Basement".
    •  Done
  • "Replicas" would be better under "Cultural impact", since the only relation the discussed replica has with the genuine article (haha I'm so clever) is that it's a 1/3rd-scale model.

History

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  • Gilbert was originally retained to design a standard 12- to 16-story commercial building for Woolworth.[47] This plan initially suited Woolworth; he later said that he originally "had no desire to erect a monument that would cause posterity to remember me".[48] Condense. There's a lot of the same thing here, namely that Woolworth didn't at first want to make a splash. Try instead: Gilbert was originally retained to design a standard 12- to 16-story commercial building for Woolworth,[47] who later said he "had no desire to erect a monument that would cause posterity to remember me".[48]
    •  Fixed
  • The sentence about Irving Underhill is a bit of a sore thumb. It's out of place and kind of lacking for details, like when exactly Underhill was hired. If you built another paragraph about Woolworth's hype campaign for the (start of) construction, this would naturally be a perfect addition. Otherwise move to "In media".
    •  Done moved to "In media".
  • [...] was believed at the time to be the largest contract for foundation construction ever awarded in the world. "Believed" strong implies the possibility of this not being the case.
  • Would it be possible to have modern conversions for the fiscal figures mentioned in the article? Four million dollars is a lot even today, but $1.50 a day is a criminal wage in 2019. Disregard this bullet-point if 'no'.

References

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GA progress

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Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed
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